A normal day in the normal way
My routine begins to unfold
Unaware, I open my mailbox
As the lark brings on the dawn
But then the world is silenced
I sense no morning, bird or dew
Just the name on letter, you.

And I wait for the rush of feeling
And I wait for the beat of my heart
And I wait for the world to spin
At the sight of the name, you.

As I read your words
The lark begins to sing
The morning develops around me
The dew begins to gleam.

There is no rush of feeling
There is no beat of my heart
The world plods steadily onward
At the sight of your name, you.

Too long have you waited to write
Too long have I waited for you
The power you once held over me
Has faded like the dew.

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"The suspense is terrible...I hope it will last!" --Willy Wonka

Oops... I put the wrong title up, because I'm an idiot! The actual title of the poem is Disillusionment.

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"The suspense is terrible...I hope it will last!" --Willy Wonka

This is a pretty good description of that moment when you discover that someone who was a big part of your life no longer means to you what you thought they did. I do have some technical critique for you though.

"Just the name on letter, you" seems a bit awkward. It the only place where you omit an article and thus it clashes. Also it's a shorter syllable count, the only line in the stanza that short, which causes a break in the flow, which if intended is fine, but doesn't seem to be here.

You might want to make it "a letter" or "the letter" depending on how you want this to present itself. Using "the letter" would make it seem possibly significant. "A letter" would perhaps make it either less important, which might work nicely as a foreshadowing of the world going on, or one of many.

Also I'd suggest dropping the haves from the final stanza. I think it would improve the flow and better match the tense of the rest of the poem.

Also, I like the modification of the second stanza into the fourth, but think you should stick with "the name" in the fourth. To me, the your/you combination there just doesn't quite work.

Keep writing. I'll keep watching.

Thanks so much!
I actually didn't even realize that I had left the article out in that phrase! Proofreading is not my strong point at all.

I actually like "the letter" better, because even though the world does go on, the narrator doesn't know that, nor does her audience, but I can see your point about using the other article.

I dropped the haves, and you're right. It does flow a little bit better (I had to bribe the english snob living in my brain who was complaining about tenses, but it worked out in the end. ).

Again, I didn't even realize that I had changed the "the" to a "your". Sometimes I just go too fast. I need to slow down...

Thanks so much for your critique and help! It is much appreciated.

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"The suspense is terrible...I hope it will last!" --Willy Wonka
"I had a lover's quarrel with the world." --Robert Frost