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Just kiss me good night.
Kiss me good night,
hold me tight,
tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Just for a little longer,
let me pretend I don’t need to be ashamed.
Don’t need to be afraid.
I can be anyone with you.
Anyone,
anything,
anyplace,
anytime.
I just need you there,
and I’m fine.
There are no worries.
No problems,
no “issues”.
Just smiles,
and joy,
and the sweet touch of love.
Tomorrow will be….
well, you know.
What will be,
will be.
What won’t,
won’t.
So just kiss me good night,
and hold me tight,
And tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Let me hide with you here in heaven,
while others run wild below.
Make me strong,
so that, one day,
I won’t need you to kiss me good night,
or hold me tight,
Or say that it’ll be “alright”.
So that I can stand strong,
out in the sun,
out in the world.
Just kiss me good night.
Kiss me good night,
hold me tight,
tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Just for a little longer,
let me pretend I don’t need to be ashamed.
Don’t need to be afraid.
I can be anyone with you.
Anyone,
anything,
anyplace,
anytime.
I just need you there,
and I’m fine.
There are no worries.
No problems,
no “issues”.
Just smiles,
and joy,
and the sweet touch of love.
Tomorrow will be….
well, you know.
What will be,
will be.
What won’t,
won’t.
So just kiss me good night,
and hold me tight,
And tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Let me hide with you here in heaven,
while others run wild below.
Make me strong,
so that, one day,
I won’t need you to kiss me good night,
or hold me tight,
Or say that it’ll be “alright”.
So that I can stand strong,
out in the sun,
out in the world.
Just kiss me good night.
While reading this, it came off as a lullaby, a very sweet and sad and wonderful lullaby all at once. There was a very smooth flow except when I came to the fifth staza, the rhythm of it kind of got off track.
The rhythm was there until I got to, "What will be, will be. What won't, won't." I think it may have to do with the "will be" has been repeated three times by that point and in my opinion it made the sentence seem a bit choppy, hence deviating from the flow. Don't get me wrong I really do like that stanza because it is ever so true, it may just be the way it was structured. I'm not sure but other than that,
I really did like it!
Definitely a lullaby of the heart. 
Good job! 
The rhythm was there until I got to, "What will be, will be. What won't, won't." I think it may have to do with the "will be" has been repeated three times by that point and in my opinion it made the sentence seem a bit choppy, hence deviating from the flow. Don't get me wrong I really do like that stanza because it is ever so true, it may just be the way it was structured. I'm not sure but other than that,
I really did like it!
Definitely a lullaby of the heart. Good job! Thank you very much for the comment. I really appreciate it. 
You're very welcome! i really loved the piece!
I'm so glad. Please feel free to comment on my other stuff too, I desperately need the critism.
You bet! i would love to go read your other stuff. If you have time, feel free to comment on some of my poetry, I would love feedback as well
i would love to go read your other stuff. If you have time, feel free to comment on some of my poetry, I would love feedback as well I'll try.
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Kiss me good night,
hold me tight,
tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Just for a little longer,
let me pretend I don’t need to be ashamed.
Don’t need to be afraid.
I can be anyone with you.
Anyone,
anything,
anyplace,
anytime.
I just need you there,
and I’m fine.
There are no worries.
No problems,
no “issues”.
Just smiles,
and joy,
and the sweet touch of love.
Tomorrow will be….
well, you know.
What will be,
will be.
What won’t,
won’t.
So just kiss me good night,
and hold me tight,
And tell me it’ll be “alright”.
Let me hide with you here in heaven,
while others run wild below.
Make me strong,
so that, one day,
I won’t need you to kiss me good night,
or hold me tight,
Or say that it’ll be “alright”.
So that I can stand strong,
out in the sun,
out in the world.
Just kiss me good night.