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Criticism would be nice. Ya know, help with the cliches and overly done themes and whatnot. XD Thankees. I'll try to return the favor.

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I have heard there are troubles of more than one kind. Some come from ahead, and some come from behind. But I've brought a big bat. I'm all ready, you see. Now my troubles are going to have trouble with me.

what i really like about this poem is how it seems to start in the middle. it seems like it was taken out of a book or something which gives the entire thing a different flavor that poetry normally has.

firstly, you have a continual punctuation error. you use an en dash instead of an em dash most of the time. this isn't necessarily wrong, but it's more commonly accepted to use an em dash. - is an en dash and -- is an em dash (which in most word processors makes a longer dash), just in case. also, when using an em dash, it's also more common to not have spaces--like so--then with.

in your third line there really shouldn't be any sort of dash. however, if you used that to really denote a large space, then keep it.

secondly, in line ten you have "trully" instead of "truly". that's the only spelling error though.

content wise, i like the description of this boy, especially how he can't whisper, his thin cheeks, and his hollow face. they show just how un-beautiful this kid really is, even if he may think otherwise.

suggestions? i think it'd be interesting to include what exactly he says just to understand why it had such an impact on the speaker.

the speaker's description of how the words effected her/him are good. i myself don't really understand how the window thing is like his fear, but i'm sure you could justify the line. :3

all in all, it was a great read.

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"tybalt, you rat-catcher, will you walk?"
"what wouldst thou have with me?"
"good king of cats, nothing but one of your nine lives."

Aww.. I was about to flame you about the dashes unil I went back and saw what you meant. Me says oh wells on that, and I can't believe I misspelled truly. I'll fix them when I'm not being lazy.

And, yesh, maybe that line is unclear, but his eyes are supposed to resemble two windows, clear for everyone to see inside. Basically, the only time he isn't lying. And what do you mean by what he says? About the world?

Thanks much for the comment. me appreciates it.

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I have heard there are troubles of more than one kind. Some come from ahead, and some come from behind. But I've brought a big bat. I'm all ready, you see. Now my troubles are going to have trouble with me.

This piece is really very good! The imagery is so strong but not so in a way in which it draws attention to itself, which I think is a very good technique! For me, at least, I did not realize how descriptive this piece was until I read the last line, "more beautiful than that damn boy could ever have been". I then went and re-read the beginning and saw just how unappealing he was. Now that is talent! .

I agree with littleboylogic, this piece does seem to come from the middle of somewhere but it stands alone just fine too!

Great job!

Seeing that you mentioned cliches in your post, I'm going to have say this: the phrase "beautiful disaster" is very overused and need not be in another poem ever again. I think you would do well to find a better phrase for the boy described in this piece, as it will also most likely yield a good title for the poem as well. It will also help with the way you repeat the world beautiful in such quick succession in that last part of the poem (unless, that is your intention).

That first line, however, is unimpeachable. It is very good, and helps the rest of the piece like a coat hanger holds up a worn leather jacket. I'm rambling now, so I'll stop.